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Great tips. Like you, my experience includes freelance newspaper writing. One day, my editor called to say that she thought my article really started on paragraph four. I thought: Ha! I teach this stuff about a “take off” start. You can’t tell me that I dawdled for three paragraphs!” When I open my doc, I could see right on my screen that she was…RIGHT! I had done warm up exercises that the reader did not need—or want.

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Great story, Denis. Ain’t it the truth. Even with experienced folks. Thanks for commenting!

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This was incredibly fascinating and enlightening. I love the way you said that writers need to warm up or clear their throat, so to speak. Thanks for sharing.

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Thank you, BEE! Glad it was useful.

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You’re welcome!

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I found this discussion about the first few pages very helpful. Is it possible to copy and paste it into my Beverly Abear, Author/Artist Facebook page?

Ps: I was on Madeline island with you around 2010! Presently working on a middle-grade series. On the 3rd book my editor told me I needed to start about 2/3 of the way into the original book. Thank you for your wise, practical advice.

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Thanks, Bev! So glad it's helpful. I remember our MISA week. Great time!

Yes, you can use the link to share, if you want. I think it would be this: https://marycarrollmoore.substack.com/p/creating-better-tension-point-1-external

Just copy and paste to your FB page.

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Awesome and actionable advice! I had a long 5 pages about how my main character met his wife in the first chapter and on reread went no thank you! Get me back to their fight!

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Yes! Go for it, Lila. Glad it was useful!

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This happened to me. The first chapter was buried in the fourth chapter before I discovered it half a book later. After ruthless edits and many rewrites a first chapter that grips the reader's attention emerged.

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Very cool, Heidi. Ruthless edits are my discovery path too!

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